FM-PMS

[akk]

current chapter word count: 4266
amount of chapter considered to be done: 20%
number of fragments merged with continuous text today: uhm... 6
number of scenes complete: 4/?
pairing that works surprisingly efficient: Seishiro & grannyS
pairing that is just uncooperative: grannyS & Subaru
character who shows currently too much of a temper: grannyS
Subaru's development until now: drugged - scared - angry - desperate - pissed - drunk - unconscious...
quote of the day: "Not influenced? You were all but spreading your legs for him!"

Comments

[jjblue1.livejournal.com]

"Not influenced? You were all but spreading your legs for him!"

That seems a rather rude things to say... I hope it's not from one of the Sumeragi clan because somehow I expected them to be more... proper than that...

[akk]

Sometimes it takes a big hammer to drive a point home. ;)
Fact finding is tough. :)

[jjblue1.livejournal.com]

Sure is but when you're not used at such language it doesn't just come natural to use it, no matter the situation you're in.
The sentence seems something said in the heat of the moment and therefore out of an impulse. If you've been brought up in a polite environment and lived among polite people and had interact only rarely with that type of language, that sentence is 'unfamiliar' and is difficult you would pick it up spontaneously.
You'll go for something more familiar or need a moment to search in your memory and come up with it.
Of course not knowing the background and who's saying it I'm just thorwing in random speculations.
Plus not being English that sentence might sound more vulgar to my ears than it really is...

[akk]

Oh, I second all the points above and then some.
The sentence is out of context and given in an early stage of the chapter. It might survive, it might not. Right now it is part of scene, coming from a person, where it works, though I might decide against it later on. Who knows?
PMS things are no reason to get agitated about, luckily. :)

[jjblue1.livejournal.com]

Yep. The sentence gave me a weird feeling because the only characters mentioned in the PMS were Subaru, Seishiro and grandmother so I keep associating to one of them.
Despite Seishiro being very polite in manga he might go for it because he interacts often with not so polite people.
Subaru would find it harder because despite living among not so polite people Subaru's not one who interacts a lot.
But grandmother... It made me think she had a hidden double personality... yet among the three she was the best candidate to say such a thing... so reading it left me with a speechless expression...
But, of course it might not be her...

[akk]

;) Just wait.

[jjblue1.livejournal.com]

Okay... I'll try to! ^_-