FM-PMS

[akk]

current chapter word count: 4266
amount of chapter considered to be done: 20%
number of fragments merged with continuous text today: uhm... 6
number of scenes complete: 4/?
pairing that works surprisingly efficient: Seishiro & grannyS
pairing that is just uncooperative: grannyS & Subaru
character who shows currently too much of a temper: grannyS
Subaru's development until now: drugged - scared - angry - desperate - pissed - drunk - unconscious...
quote of the day: "Not influenced? You were all but spreading your legs for him!"

Comments

[akk]

Oh, I second all the points above and then some.
The sentence is out of context and given in an early stage of the chapter. It might survive, it might not. Right now it is part of scene, coming from a person, where it works, though I might decide against it later on. Who knows?
PMS things are no reason to get agitated about, luckily. :)

[jjblue1.livejournal.com]

Yep. The sentence gave me a weird feeling because the only characters mentioned in the PMS were Subaru, Seishiro and grandmother so I keep associating to one of them.
Despite Seishiro being very polite in manga he might go for it because he interacts often with not so polite people.
Subaru would find it harder because despite living among not so polite people Subaru's not one who interacts a lot.
But grandmother... It made me think she had a hidden double personality... yet among the three she was the best candidate to say such a thing... so reading it left me with a speechless expression...
But, of course it might not be her...

[akk]

;) Just wait.

[jjblue1.livejournal.com]

Okay... I'll try to! ^_-