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Editing Crystal Structures 2
Editing Crystal Structures 2 today was a kind of frustrating task, consisting mostly of shuffling content and thinking about how to tell that content more efficiently without so much tech-talk (about fictitious crystal technology - the "Waldo horizon" *wince*) and doing a first rough cut out of the no longer needed emo-bits (because the investigation on Andor solved that issue between Zach and Goose quite nicely and a lot more elegantly)!
All this resulting in
remaining scenes to be written in order:
=You failed to consume your daily amount of necessary nutrients again.= ALMA's pink eyeball appeared on the small screen of the door panel after the door locked.
"I had lunch at the cafeteria," Niko stated off-handedly, kicking off her shoes.
=The only substance you consumed since you left here at 08:47 was water, at 11:39, 14:51, and 16:04,= the AI corrected her icily. =Shall I make a neurologist appointment regarding your memory lapses?=
"A neuro—" Niko found herself gaping when ALMA's words caught up with her. "You tracked me?!" she flared. "How dare you to—?"
=I did not," the AI huffed. =I merely contacted the mainframe. It is more efficient to have Rhondda contact the sub-AIs responsible for nutrient donations on base.=
"It didn't occur to you that I might have eaten something they didn't provide?" Niko asked, exasperated, as she headed down the stairs.
=You didn't leave the base to get it,= ALMA replied, unperturbed, changing location from the door panel to the wide screen of the com unit above her bed. =You still require 747 calories to reach the minimum amount of nutrients for a person of your weight and current profession.= There was an electronic sizzle that suspiciously sounded like a derisive snort. =And next time, document your potted palm snacks if you want me to consider them for your diet plan.=
Editing Crystal Structures 2 today was a kind of frustrating task, consisting mostly of shuffling content and thinking about how to tell that content more efficiently without so much tech-talk (about fictitious crystal technology - the "Waldo horizon" *wince*) and doing a first rough cut out of the no longer needed emo-bits (because the investigation on Andor solved that issue between Zach and Goose quite nicely and a lot more elegantly)!
All this resulting in
- CS 2 being down to 42 pages now.
- the freshly written part about the investigation on Andor being done (save for the final meeting with Denise (a.k.a O'Mega) already known from "Rape" and a x-over scene with the Niko-thread about Negata having his kittens about procreating Supertroopers.
- the Niko thread losing 2 scenes by way of condensing them into the other scenes by way of memory / mention, thus giving the existing scenes more plot-relevant substance and weight similar to the Andor bits
remaining scenes to be written in order:
- Niko starting unpacking the crates & observing Negata losing his shit in the corridor
- Niko meditating & finding her mind drifting towards work (and the obscene amount of permits needed to operate a starstone driven device at BETA) instead of dealing with her personal issues
- Rewrite of the S5 (-Niko)'s meeting with Denise
- Niko & crystal engineer getting the reader to work
- adaptation of Ranger-1 returning to Earth (minor work)
=You failed to consume your daily amount of necessary nutrients again.= ALMA's pink eyeball appeared on the small screen of the door panel after the door locked.
"I had lunch at the cafeteria," Niko stated off-handedly, kicking off her shoes.
=The only substance you consumed since you left here at 08:47 was water, at 11:39, 14:51, and 16:04,= the AI corrected her icily. =Shall I make a neurologist appointment regarding your memory lapses?=
"A neuro—" Niko found herself gaping when ALMA's words caught up with her. "You tracked me?!" she flared. "How dare you to—?"
=I did not," the AI huffed. =I merely contacted the mainframe. It is more efficient to have Rhondda contact the sub-AIs responsible for nutrient donations on base.=
"It didn't occur to you that I might have eaten something they didn't provide?" Niko asked, exasperated, as she headed down the stairs.
=You didn't leave the base to get it,= ALMA replied, unperturbed, changing location from the door panel to the wide screen of the com unit above her bed. =You still require 747 calories to reach the minimum amount of nutrients for a person of your weight and current profession.= There was an electronic sizzle that suspiciously sounded like a derisive snort. =And next time, document your potted palm snacks if you want me to consider them for your diet plan.=
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Date: 2013-04-22 00:52 (UTC)From: