BAUplan, FM-PMS

[akk]

Week 1 of 2 of my vacation is now over and -yes- there is still a planet beyond my desk (and story files on my harddrive). I planned on working on "Business As Usual" (or at least the polishing for the PDF/e-book version of "Family Matters"), instead I'm playing with my long going Family Matters side-story "Mariko" - a.k.a. the sordid tale of Seishiro, his kids, and a house in Osaka... Okay, not so much of the last one, because I'm not that much into architecture. Anyway, here's the result of last week's work...

Story: Mariko
word count: 3191 (down from 3903)
less because I now take advantage of the episodic nature of the story and tell some of the crucial details in retrospect / memories, thus eliminating a lot of otherwise necessary but unimportant clutter.
structure: Part I (1983, just prae bet, Seiran), Part II (1987, Paper doesn't blush), Part II (1991, between end-of-bet and Hokuto's death, Jiro and Taro).
scenes Part I: cliff, illusion, biology practice, killing schedule, {caught in the act}.
scenes Part II: the patience of the predator
scenes Part III: {without an eye}, phone order, {dead man mating, accommodating a Sumeragi}
[complete, incomplete, {missing}]
quote of the day Part I: "Is there a fridge?"
quote of the day Part II: "She might become prey."
quote of the day Part III: "Why don't you take off your glasses?"

...and I probably should stop making plans for specific writing tasks (see above). I always end up working on something different anyway!

Comments

[lunewcity.livejournal.com]

That's great :)
Mariko is an interesting character even if there are more questions than answers about her past in the main story. Or thanks to that.
And I fail to imagine the father-daughter relationship in this "family". :)))

[akk]

That relation will be no-sided at best, even one-sided may turn out fatal.
However, who knows what Subaru will cause with that in the end.

[lunewcity.livejournal.com]

Subaru is totally unpredictable, he can cause anything)) And there are reasons for his worry. If he is planning to grow old with Seishiro, Subaru has to do something about the pension plan of Sakurazukamori. So I guess he won't just ignore Mariko's kids after he learnt about them.

[akk]

However, things might grow ugly if he interferes with Seishiro's own plans in that regard.

[lunewcity.livejournal.com]

Or Sakura's.
Your caracters manage to be domestic and deadly at the same time. ;) A wonderful combination.

[akk]

Since when does domestic exclude deadliness? Even the most homey wife has to prepare the meat, neh?

[lunewcity.livejournal.com]

Yes, but how many city dwellers kill their meat before cooking? Chickens could as well grow on trees or in a cloning lab, nobody would notice. And a usual housewife with half a dozen of sharp knives has a bit different set of skills than an assassin.
That reminds me of "Mr. and Mrs. Smith" a bit. But Jane couldn't cook. Nobody's perfect)

[akk]

true. and eggs come off a conveyor belt...

on the other hand, if you ever went holiday shopping, you'll know that the average city dweller is a lot more murderous than the typical medieval invasion army when shopping for his/her loved ones, hence... ;)

But this is getting entirely off topic.
I think my main point is that the depiction of most dangerous persons as not being domestic is kind of beside the point: given their "work", relying on cleaning & cooking personnel seems kind of negligent most of the time. So domesticity to some degree is a necessity.

[lunewcity.livejournal.com]

good reasoning :)

[primera]

I am soooo excited for this story :) I love the depth Seishiro's backstory adds to his both character and the Seishiro-Subaru narrative :))

[akk]

Given the time I'm working on this one (almost all of FM... which is *years*) and the number of revisions, the plot has seen over time - the result will either be gorgeous or abysmal. Mediocre is pretty much out of the picture, I'm afraid. :)