FM-PMS

[akk]

current chapter word count: 9383
less because I did a lot of decluttering and streamlining in the rest of the "Kokyo East Gardens" part
resulting in Subaru no longer meets Michiko and -sadly- "kids in the park" had to go entirely, but -yay- Seishiro's shower visit is back in (and Subaru is no longer an idiot for leaving the crowded administration area with somebody allegedly belonging to Seishiro's wretched organization)
giving a streamlined, straight-to-the-point plot without any not-really-relevant OCs and no filler stuff & awkward transitions (it also has the right pace for the events now)
character no longer violating basic self-preservation: Subaru
character again getting "the sight": Michiko
character finally being portrayed as self-reliant: Mariko (Michiko's older sister)
research of the day: car parking near the Otemon gate, Palace Hotel Tokyo
quote of the day: "Does he still object to be held during sex?"

And here's the -sadly- gone for good scene: kids in the park

"*Rawr!*" an agitated little boy's voice yelled behind him. "I'm Godzilla!"

Subaru spotted two boys, probably seven or eight years old, racing across the lawn on the other side of the path. Had the park been opened already? But he had yet to write the clearance--

"Gojira," the second one corrected with the attitude of a long years scholar only partially owed to the spectacles askew on his nose. "And I'm sure it's just an old T-Rex anyway."

"Can't be a T-Rex!" The first one huffed. "They're already dead!"

"I bet my T-Rex will beat your Gojira any time!"

"Godzilla! And I'm gonna be an archaeologist to prove it's not a T-Rex." He showed his tongue. "They're *extinct*!"

"That's a *palaeontologist*." 'Mr. scholar' huffed. "Like *papa*!"

"Father's a vet, Jiro," a teenage girl in the black uniform of a high school Subaru didn't recognize corrected, rolling her eyes as she strolled past him. "That's about *living pets*!" She muttered *little brothers* and yelled, "Taro! If I have to fish you out off that pond, you're so in for it! You--"

Comments

[primera]

OMG. Three kids. Seishiro's three kids. I love it. Omg, please tell me if we'll ever get to see any interactions between Seishiro and his offspring. I am so curious about how he would act.

[akk]

I'm not sure how much interaction there's going to be, given that they're OCs and I try very much NOT to write utter sap. However, given that there's the upcoming question of succession and his blatant disregard for the Mori, I'm sure there will be cameo-appearances one way or another.

But no, I don't intend to turn them into regular characters - or regularly appearing characters - for that matter. They are in the same slot as Akiko or Mariko for that matter. Characters, required for the background of the main characters to be complete, but not meant to spend time in the focus of attention.

This scene was ultimately written to show that the children didn't grow up like Seishiro did, but I realized that could be shown without introducing them as actual characters at this point. Therefore the scene had to go (even if I'm sad to see it gone because I liked it).

Because, let's face it, Seishiro's obsession is Subaru. Nobody else.

[primera]

Makes sense! This reminds me why I like how you handle OCs.

The upcoming question of succession

eeeeeeeeeeee *__* I'm gonna die.

Because, let's face it, Seishiro's obsession is Subaru. Nobody else.

Indeed. Oh S/s, how I love thee.

[akk]

Well, said succession probably takes care that Seishiro won't be the "father of the year" (final or not) *ever*. ;)

[japanimecrazed]

Aww, I'm sad this scene was cut, but thanks for sharing anyway! It's cute. I hope the kids show up again. I have a weakness for well-written OCs and yours are always excellent.

[akk]

:-) as said above, brief appearances in the next installment of the Decagram are very likely - and I won't rule out one or two side-fics dealing with them (there's this very specific idea about the girl's occupation plans that I just might want to explore!) - but one of the things that keep OCs bearable is to keep them from overtaking the fic.

And, frankly, I don't think daddy!Seishiro will be a nice topic to write.