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CS5 saw some rather drastic edits over the last two days, namely the Eliza thread got severely cut back, resulting CS5 currently being 13 pages (down from 17) of continuous text. However, it puts the Eliza thread at the same level as the military thread, allowing for a better balance in story telling.
As a plus: since now I have to go over the whole chapter with a very fine "continuity comb" anyway, I can make better use of Eliza's unique perspective as a true outsider to the Rangers and their abilities. After all, she was frozen before their unit was even established!
"As if they'd freeze a Galaxy Ranger!"
"They've got no such qualms when it comes to a supertrooper, Lady."
A supertrooper? Eliza froze. She remembered the broadcasts about the disastrous military project before they left for Kirwin. But those-- "Let me guess," she asked sardonically, "you were the baby-face?"
As a plus: since now I have to go over the whole chapter with a very fine "continuity comb" anyway, I can make better use of Eliza's unique perspective as a true outsider to the Rangers and their abilities. After all, she was frozen before their unit was even established!
"As if they'd freeze a Galaxy Ranger!"
"They've got no such qualms when it comes to a supertrooper, Lady."
A supertrooper? Eliza froze. She remembered the broadcasts about the disastrous military project before they left for Kirwin. But those-- "Let me guess," she asked sardonically, "you were the baby-face?"
