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Rewriting CS4:
Sirens howled. The burning interceptor screeched into the protective gel foam, careening, and — engines still red-hot — came to a standstill in the middle of the emergency runway. Fire extinguishing foam, cooling gel, and shock absorbance in case of a belated explosion was sprayed onto it. Environmental parameters were constantly monitored, reported to the controllers, and adjusted—
Goose opened the cockpit seal the moment he got green and leaped down to the slippery concrete. A glance at the interceptor's engines told him it had been nothing short of a miracle that he'd reached Earth — burning —, made planetfall — burning —, and landed — burning — on the ER in one piece. Without exploding.
Cool. Although the gel foam coating everything around him and his boots up to his knees now smelled like pissed-on plankton.
"You look a disgrace," came Walsh's voice from behind him.
...yes, right now - on the last day of my vacation - it FINALLY works that well! On the plus side, I'm really making progress right now, and am going to return to the previous written plot soon, thus going from rewriting to editing again, which typically works a lot faster! This time I get this baby done and out on the net! Definitely!!
Sirens howled. The burning interceptor screeched into the protective gel foam, careening, and — engines still red-hot — came to a standstill in the middle of the emergency runway. Fire extinguishing foam, cooling gel, and shock absorbance in case of a belated explosion was sprayed onto it. Environmental parameters were constantly monitored, reported to the controllers, and adjusted—
Goose opened the cockpit seal the moment he got green and leaped down to the slippery concrete. A glance at the interceptor's engines told him it had been nothing short of a miracle that he'd reached Earth — burning —, made planetfall — burning —, and landed — burning — on the ER in one piece. Without exploding.
Cool. Although the gel foam coating everything around him and his boots up to his knees now smelled like pissed-on plankton.
"You look a disgrace," came Walsh's voice from behind him.
...yes, right now - on the last day of my vacation - it FINALLY works that well! On the plus side, I'm really making progress right now, and am going to return to the previous written plot soon, thus going from rewriting to editing again, which typically works a lot faster! This time I get this baby done and out on the net! Definitely!!
