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Update on the Editing / Rewriting of Crystal Structures 2.
The newly added thread detailing the investigation on Andor is coming along well. Of the 10 new scenes, 6 are complete and smooth, 1 needs more polishing but is overall complete, 2 need more work, and 1 is still missing. The detail of Doc hacking their hotel's adult Tri-D service proved useful and therefore stays. The additional background information of Zach's experiences before the Psychocrypt and the Board's paranoia regarding uncontrolled proliferation of augmented DNA work well, even if I still have a hard time writing a believable vid conference with Prof. Negata.
CS 2 is currently at 47 pages and will probably grow to 50 pages with this part properly written. However, Niko's plot thread will be threaded into this one and though it still has to be adapted to the changes, it's based on already existing text, so it most likely will not up the page number.
Given that the new material works way better in establishing communication/understanding between Zach and Goose, I expect to cut some of the wordier scenes later on, getting rid of some (if not all) of the more annoyingly !emo.
Anyway, stay tuned! Things get exciting! :)
"Do you know that I have a standing order to report any indication that — and I quote verbatim — 'Gooseman encourages the other sex to associate'?"
"Encourages…?" Doc gaped. "Did nobody send the Board a decent holo of him? He doesn't have to encourage them! If looks removed clothes, we'd need the Laredo to carry replacement pants! That's my point!"
"And it's exactly why I didn't see anything to report so far."
The newly added thread detailing the investigation on Andor is coming along well. Of the 10 new scenes, 6 are complete and smooth, 1 needs more polishing but is overall complete, 2 need more work, and 1 is still missing. The detail of Doc hacking their hotel's adult Tri-D service proved useful and therefore stays. The additional background information of Zach's experiences before the Psychocrypt and the Board's paranoia regarding uncontrolled proliferation of augmented DNA work well, even if I still have a hard time writing a believable vid conference with Prof. Negata.
CS 2 is currently at 47 pages and will probably grow to 50 pages with this part properly written. However, Niko's plot thread will be threaded into this one and though it still has to be adapted to the changes, it's based on already existing text, so it most likely will not up the page number.
Given that the new material works way better in establishing communication/understanding between Zach and Goose, I expect to cut some of the wordier scenes later on, getting rid of some (if not all) of the more annoyingly !emo.
Anyway, stay tuned! Things get exciting! :)
"Do you know that I have a standing order to report any indication that — and I quote verbatim — 'Gooseman encourages the other sex to associate'?"
"Encourages…?" Doc gaped. "Did nobody send the Board a decent holo of him? He doesn't have to encourage them! If looks removed clothes, we'd need the Laredo to carry replacement pants! That's my point!"
"And it's exactly why I didn't see anything to report so far."
