I'm still struggling with the memorial service. While I loved Seishiro's acid commentary, it made the scene too long to fit with the speed of events. In addition, the change in mood once the un-presence of Mono Fuma is discovered, didn't work well. So I reworked it (again), tightened it (some more), and have to come up with a sharper service description (because if I as the author am beginning to get bored reading it, the Twin Star would kill the priest for the in between LULZ for sure).
I know it feels like stand-still at the moment, but each time, more of the text is deemed "acceptable" and "for the keep". I hope the following bits will go a lot faster than this one.
In the meantime, let's fuss about
I know it feels like stand-still at the moment, but each time, more of the text is deemed "acceptable" and "for the keep". I hope the following bits will go a lot faster than this one.
In the meantime, let's fuss about
- a lethal ornament by Heckler and Koch, artfully concealed under a suitjacket
- the metallic snap of a fan opening
- and green teashades that had seen Shibuya fall, while they talked about choc chips icecream.